TRANSCENDENT LOOP: The place all worlds are bornすべての世界が生まれる場所

amazing ...

Very well written, a novel with two major genres : gangsters and system!The opening chapter is already very magnificent. The character is strong and protective.Cannot wait to read more! Good job!!!

Dropped at chapter 70. Writing quality becomes horrendous after chapter 40. Gender pronouns constantly messed up. Names translated several different ways so you never know who is talking. Sentences occasionally being complete nonsense. Paragraphs will occasionally miss punctuation entirely. So you dont know if someone is talking or thinking. It's just confusing and hard to read. Not to mention zero information is given on world back ground. That includes the game world. then there is the newbie characters able to get equipment/mechs that one shot God like beings. I really tried but it is very hard to enjoy in its current state. Needs an editor desperately. Then maybe a chapter or two added to the beginning dedicated to building the real world and game world. Maybe the MC history.

I like the fact that the grades and cultivation levels are all conveniently listed at the start, that way, no one would get lost and even if they did, they could just go back to the first chapter. This is one basic thing that many cultivation writers tend to miss. Also, the story is great, of course it couldn't rival Super Gene or Vampire System but it's good all on its own. Great job author! Don't drop it, this is bound to come far :)

Hey! this is the author. I really appreciate you guys taking time to read it. Every kind of criticism and review are welcomed! Thanks a lot for reading it! ❤️❤️

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