There is a lot of potential in this story. Its story development is fast and purposeful. Each development really hits home with such a emotional subject matter, and it did honestly hook me in.I would like the author to just take their time abit more. Slow it down and include more detail. The first 'date' of the two characters could of had a bit more time and detail put into it as an example. Great story, great development. Just needs a bit more time put into certain areas and this could be an amazing piece of work.