So this was definitely an interesting story which can attract those who play these types of games such as myself and I enjoy how the author was able to capture the feeling like the odd one out around many other experienced players. Sadly, while the current story is very interesting, it is riddled with grammatical errors, bland descriptions, and a severe lack of emotions. There is much, and I mean much to be desired from the novel as it has a great plot but it isn't executed very well. Taking some time to re-read your chapters and rewrite them will definitely increase the popularity of your story. Writing isn't that easy, but I know you can improve!
Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact [email protected]. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
