The Vast Wilderness Spanning Thirty Thousand Li - Reviews

"Chief?"

''You are jealous of the girl.'' Says Furry stating the obvious to everyone, but Natasha.

(I was a shy person and since I recognize the surrounding of this body I was already in the hospital. Since I was bored I just immerse myself with novel to live up my world. Since you still know nothing of novel. I will explain it to you.)

Sosuke Aizen had just took control of the Hueco Mundo, beating Barragan and making him submit had been even easier than he thought it would be. The self-proclaimed King of Hueco Mundo was just so arrogant, he thought nothing could touch him.

Kaya ba isang taon siyang wala dito sa Pinas dahil sa Australia niya pinagbubuntis ang batang 'yan?

"I didn't read any of your anime books and I don't know what you're talking about I don't have your fetish lets just keep an eye out and see if we find anything out here."

Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show, on get paid

Somebody once asked could I spare some change for gas?

And as I sat there brooding on the old, unknown world, I thought of Gatsby's wonder when he first picked out the green light at the end of Daisy's dock. He had come a long way to this blue lawn and his dream must have seemed so close that he could hardly fail to grasp it. He did not know that it was already behind him, somewhere back in that vast obscurity beyond the city, where the dark fields of the republic rolled on under the night.

Wonderful read so far. I'll leave a more comprehensive review later on  when there are more chapters. Keep up the good work, and I wish you all the best.

Good so far. I say give it a chance. Drama is good

Potential! I must say, it is exciting diving into the world. While it's not without flaws, the potential of the plot and promise on display are certainly good.Writing - Needs improvement. A lot. But it's readable, understable and sufficient. Still, if the author can improve the writing by a level or two, it will be amazing. Tip- Focus on some realistic reactions from characters, situations and such. Plot- Since there isn't much of plot given till now, I have considered it's potential. If The author plays it right, the plot can become a great piece among 'system' contents.Character - Dialogues! they make or break the characters and it is good to see, character have plenty interaction. Well done there. Just needs some refinement.World Building- Although not unique in its genre with systems, ranks, monsters, etc. I could understand the world quite a lot from the first 15 chapters. So, I would say it was done great. Well, there is more to explore in future, so I belive again in it's potential.Overall, it is a good story. Needs editing and refinements, but still enjoyable.