The Redo of a Novel's Villain: Moira - Reviews

A Copy of Astral Pet Shop!!?Seriously This Copy.

Since this is the 10th review, I suppose I should be giving myself one in order to finally show the ratings.This novel is inspired by the games that I have played in the past such as Dragon Age, Skyrim, Kingdom of Amalur, Neverwinter Nights, and other RPG games. If you fellas are looking for an RPG based story where the MC progresses systematically in a fantasy-driven world, then be my guest and read my story. Most importantly, I hope you fellas enjoy!!

Very cliche start, with a few ridiculous points in the plot you have to ignore. Like, MC supposed to be top military something... but only been in four years, with no contact in that time.  No explanation yet.  Writing is mediocre, but the plot has hope within the tropes.

This story had promise. When I started reading this I expected somewhere along the lines of actual Mages training and honing on their respective realms and then eventually fuse or enhance the realms. The start of the novel was great up until the girl decided she wanted to tag along.I was fine with this to an extent until the author had to force the MC out of gaining experience from traveling in the wilderness. The author then inserted some stupid decisions that made some important figure help him on deaths door after a dumb conflict that could have been avoided. after that the MC just starting a training montage for a long time...again.What really made me quit this novel is when I realized after he went strolling through a city the whole story devolved into a ****ty xianxia novel With the retarded MC being overprotective of woman and angry noble sons because of MC interfering. I expected more but I guess I should not expect too much on this kind of site.The girl that tags along the MC just ruins the novel. The problem is not having a girl tag along. THE problem is how to author presented her. It's like the author is trying so hard to make her a ML but fails at it way too much.

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Interesting story so far . engrossing and rich characters.

[well we still have a long day ahead... ]

And whiped all my sadness..

gender: male

Self glorification has never bbeen my strong suit.Regardless though, I'd implore you to give it a shot. It encompasses everything my traditional readers want (you know what I mean ?) but has a touch of new flavor. Something not seen from kultur before. I hope you enjoy it. As usual, no ntrNo YuriFeel free to ask questions under reply. T for thanks!

I liked how the book is written, each chapter progress the story smoothly. With detailed explanation of the surroundings, the characters and their emotions, you can easily imagine the scenario. I enjoyed ready and definitely worth spending time on. Side that can still be improved: Identify paragraphs that can be separated and lessen filler words for better reading experience. (Like using "Tall and Imposing" in a single sentence. It literally mean the same thing.)