The Phoenix Rebirth App

Hey love the 8 chapters so far.
I wanted you to start off with a 5 star review XD

(ignore this ignore this ignore this ignore this ignore this ignore this ignore this) just getting them 140 characters

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Mc has the worst qualities and is not fit to be a protagonist, he is weak-willed, he has no self confined, he can't talk to girls without stuttering.

This not minor either, he straight up went home and cried when a random girl told him to stop flipping pages quickly.

He can see he has infinite potential yet he thinks of himself as worthless.

Later on he suddenly gains a boost of confidence at random, first, he sees a high power gang doing shady stuff and makes sure to avoid them but when someone they abducted runs towards him and asks for help he helps them! willingly putting his own and his father's life in danger for a stranger.

In essence, this mc is confident at the wrong times and has low self-esteem everywhere else.

The only good thing about this story is the system and the update stability.

this is quite good i got a few laughs , i would advise putting more detail into your discription of the people and the  place like what kind of eyes the person had the surounding  what the person is wearing the weather the streets  the kind of aura the person carries the expression but not to much talk
And with all that your book will become top notch

Over all the story is amazing. The author could definitely improve on world development, but the story line and character development is on point. A great book so would definitely recommend.

Good grammar which I really enjoy. I like the personality of all the characters and the different outlook on cultivation because I read lots of different cultivation kind of books and they’re usually very similar which makes it less enjoyable.