Your book has great description and excellent verbiage. However, it lacks substance. Each chapter has so much exposition casually explained that it feels forced.Ch2 is Silas talking, demonstrating his magic to no one.Ch3 is talking, establishing Silas' overcautious nature and Saya being forward.Ch4 +2 characters, more talking.Ch5 is talking and more magic exposition.Almost nothing substantial happens, Author.Compare this to the prologue. Terrified scientist goes teleports 8 bodies away. Baddie shows up, taunts him and beats him. There is suspense, strong emotion, and extreme actions of a desperate spellcasting and a villainess beating a defenseless person.I advise you hold off on providing so much exposition, so many characters. Give us 1 or 2 and provide an active conflict where you can demonstrate their abilities, their personalities, their goals and motivations.As a reader, I'd prefer to discover exposition than be told. Instead of 'all the humans are dead' I'd rather hear Huxley's tortured screams, full of rage and despair, cursing Leviathan for her and her people's cruel genocide. The characters' abilities could be revealed in action scenes instead of briefly explained.World events can be conveyed through character conversation, like you did with the ferals. Also, Silas has no personality except that he's distrustful and hides from girls.Thanks for writing. I hope my relatively harsh review won't dissuade you from continuing as a writer. You have some very cool, I daresay "novel" concepts that have a lot of potential. I look forward to your growth. Let's work hard together, Author.
