The moment I put on the sunglasses my grandfather left behind, a hidden network unfolded before my eyes—countless talents gleaming, waiting for me to claim them.
“Grandpa… just what kind of treasure did you leave me?!”
The book have a very interesting premise and the writing quality is superb. However, there are many things that I noticed about the novel that drags it down. The story developes in a very weird and confusing was that make it hard to follow or understand. Importent things and features are added in randomly without any explanation really on what they do and their importance to the overall story. The MCs thought process can be said to be cunning but also a bit one tracked minded. One example of this is when MC kills someone and obtains a new cultivation system, and decides to join that organization in the future to obtain the resources needed in the future when there is a million other things that needed to be done beforehand. The people's thought process in the novel just seem a bit out of place, with them doing things in certain ways to make the story work. This can be greatly attributed to the lack of info provided to us by the author. With random cultivation systems added and new things(treasures,seeds,currency ) introduced it just becomes confusing. The author tries to provide mystery and it is intriguing, but with the severe lack of knowledge regarding the current situation the mysterious aspects just becomes hazy and bring apon more confusion. The power system is also very complex, which is understandable in the world setting currently. The math in the novel is a but wonky but not too bad if u don't look into it too much. the power levels of individuals are all over the place with individuals killing people of way higher cultivation levels and being in places they shouldn't be. (one example is a heavenly god killing a dao emperor in the mortal realm, but is still a weakling in the ground scheme of things when dao emperors are the highest level Acheivalble). I have quite a dislike of the system which seems to be very out of place and provide random helpful things with little to none explanation. Maybe it's just me who find the book confusing with the lack of information, and others can decipher it fine. Overall the book is a decent read, and has a very interesting concept.
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You did really great author...?? There is only two chapters but I am hooked with a story...Your writing style is really great....?? Yes your hardwork is shown in two chapters only...Hope to read more chapters in future...keep up the good work ?
