The Grand Alteration (Retry) - Reviews

Writing Euphie, my version of her at least, is actually pretty fun, as indicated by her taking up I think over half the chapter. There is a certain degree of uncertainty that I want to display about how 'good' Euphie is. In the anime she was kind of the sickeningly sweet variety where she was literally too nice to everyone. That wasn't believable even before the whole SAZ idea. Anyway, I leave it up to you to guess what her long term goal is. Some of you seem to have come to conclusions as to what Kallen and Euphie's relationship will be based on an earlier 'spoiler.' Let's see how certain all of you remain about those conclusions with this chapter.

"That's enough to fill my sorrow here," answer Akihiko

Once they were all healed, he could think of how to proceed next.

'Maybe this is a god sent blessing to me. Thank god I'm still not forgotten .'

I have to she is my friend,mai said.

        Ipagpatawad mo ako may naguguluhan".....(Please forgive, I for one is confused/Bewildered).

"Never!" Chris spat on Arthur's boot.

Fed to the rules and I hit the ground running

and the person we created will fight each othet, whoever survives is the winner.

so far good, netorare scenes are well detailed and has variations each time also the story progress quite fast would recommend to any ntr readers

I'll give it five stars for its great start and will write a detailed review later. However, it's an extremely captivating story and absolutely worth reading. I highly recommend it to everyone!

I will say I’m writing this for fun. I don’t have a huge plot line with every little detail planned out, simply going with the flow.But doesn’t mean I’m not going to do character development, etc.Also, I invite constructive criticism, not criticism, but feel free to send either ?.