Sorry RebirthDao... I tried, I REALLY tried, to read your novel but you need to continue studying the English language before writing a novel in that language. Well, perhaps you are writing in your native language and translating it over to English.
Whichever it is, I could only get about half way into your first chapter before I had to just stop. There are just too many grammatical errors and such, making it far too frustrating to continue on.
I wish the best of luck to you.