This was the most emotionally damaging story I ever read in my teens that shaped my personality a lot. There were tears enough to fill a pool along with laughter that could echo hundred and hundreds of miles.
Trust, your story is just nice. I don't have much to say but I feel like Jonah could have actually succeeded without having to sacrifice himself. I just hope he somehow comes back later on.Asides that, the story is too good to be fiction even ?
BIGGEST ISSUE: The ENTIRE romantic conflict of the novel can be resolved by like chapter 10 if the MC just offers one sentence of explanation but instead he says everything but that and it’s infuriating as F.Outside of that: The novel is a bit cringe with its kind of random use of JP words & the overly edgy MC but the writing is otherwise superb IMO. The characters are interesting and I genuinely root for the romance and understand why the MC falls for the ML but the ML doesn’t rly have a reason to like the MC or at least his motives aren’t clear yet (c50).Everything 5/5 besides story which is 3/5 for aforementioned reasons.
