The fanfiction has a promising and interesting idea that has the potential to become a great story. Unfortunately, the reading experience is hindered by the poor writing style and bad grammar. There are many spelling and grammar errors that can cause difficulties for readers, and the plot is confusing due to unnecessarily complex sentences and unclear phrasing. We would recommend the author to take more time to express their ideas more clearly and precisely, and to conduct a thorough revision to improve the readability and enjoyment of the story. Despite the weaknesses of the writing style, the story is promising and has the potential to become a masterpiece if carefully revised.
