I tried to give it a shot because I don't like to believe most reviews. believe them for this story.it's a good system idea but the grammar is just odd. "upbeat young man" was stated to get on nerves and I'm like "no way." it's worse than they mentioned. one PARAGRAPH had it 4 or 5 times. author, I appreciate the attempt. I would stress that practice makes perfect. in future stories, please try to look at synonyms for your MC to avoid repetition.
