What is up with this?! Everytime I start reading something with an 8yr old, there's some creepy weird sexual or romantic tension with an older woman...this is super awkward and gross...the MC is 8!!! even if he is much older at heart, his physical body is still 8!!!! yuck!!!
5/writing quality is great for the standerds of this site3/ idk stability of updates4/ good story development so far4/ all characters are bearable and somewhat reasonable so far5/ world background is somewhat unique and goodGood book but the author is absolute TRASH at titles like why not name it "Obelisk" or "The Great Monolith" instead of a cheesy title, quite literally describing the main character. Also never put the word system in ur titles it sounds lazy and of poor quality.
Great story. The plot is very niceThe character design is almost perfect because of the mixture of teenage experiences. I think you must also make the character tougher to help with his development.The grammatical errors are alittle too much!Make sure to edit your story before you post them.However, your story is very nice and even though I don't really like martial arts stories, yours is the first one I really like.Keep I up!
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hiwellthis is awkwardanyways as the time tested tradition of shameless self-review and promotionso i rate this work 8/10 i like this a lotbut the plot is sooooo slowwww
