The story was well written, the vocabulary was beautiful and easy to understand, maybe it's just the paragraphs that seem long for a webnovel. Still, it's good enough for the most part. Just need to practice a lot and enjoy the moment of writing ideas that rarely others can do. Don't mind what people think while you enjoy the process of writing it. Because in the end it's all about finding happiness and you probably already know how to find it. Good job, Author.