Magic Devoured

Great story, if only you would update the chapters faster it would be better. Also explain the past of the heirs twin brother more, for example why was he locked up.

Hey great book! But I think some parts such as chapter 1 and 2 are a bit rushed i think. I think if u slowed down a bit and extended the story by explaining the emotions and monologues, it would make the story even better and worth reading. If me as a reader got an insight to the Demon child's mind it would make the story even better. It just a suggestion for the future chapters. Thanks!

The burial of a great man was displayed in front of that crowd, and in the middle of it all, Kori sat on the bench closest to the podium.

On the ship with Garp, Sakazuki was seething at the admittance that they had to play nice with the pirates " Why do we have to give face, we're marines and they should give way for justice" Garp only scoffed, " Why don't you try enforcing it then, But be warned they are my ancestors, If you can't even land one proper hit on me what hope do you have to touch them" Sakazuki could only give a subdued sneer while Borsalino yawned and Kuzan looked towards the island contemplatively.

Phone conversation...

Angel rushed into her faculty. she was already late for lecture. her lecture was by 8:am, but the time was already 8:15am. she woke up very late. Jessica had left the hostel already when she woke up. She seemed not to understand why Jessica didn't wake her up when she knew that they were going for same lecture. she would know her reason for that when she sees her in class.