So far, an interesting novel with nice lessons from the father character, as well as an interesting storyline. However, in the first chapter, there are too many commas in each sentence and many run-on sentences. It gets better after that chapter, but there are still many wrong tenses used, the characters don't really speak their age, and there's incorrect character quotation punctuations and capitalizations (ex- "back then, these were the days!." should become "Back then, those were the days!" To the author, I suggest researching a bit more on quotations by reading physical books in the english language).
But these are all pretty small things if you ignore them and just read the story. Pretty good overall, I would definitely keep reading if the author releases more chapters. Keep up the good work, can't wait to see what happens next!
