The premise is nice and interesting but the dialogue and how it's written sounds stiff and awkward. reminds me of AI stories but I'm not very certain about that. The author also tends to state the obvious and it's done over and over which makes the dialogues very awkward to read.Like there's this OP potion he's got and he says it's good if he uses it right but there might be greater rewards if he donates it? like bro you literally have a charity system that gives you 25x what you give out. why is this even a question?
