Okay, I’ve read up to the latest chapter, so I think I can give a relatively fair review.Overall, I think it’s a pretty good read .Now for a deeper look:Personally, the start was a bit slow and confusing, but that’s understandable as the author was still trying to shape and understand his own world.One thing I noticed was the mix of Eastern and Western names and structures (e.g., Alex, baron…).Honestly, I think it would’ve been better if you focused entirely on an Eastern style and naming scheme. That would’ve given the story a deeper and more immersive feel.Another thing was the tournament, it lasted way, way too long. I even considered dropping the story or skipping that part.After that, though, things started to pick up.Lastly, I hope you don’t stretch the slave mark subplot for too long.And,It would be great if you shifted more toward an Eastern theme. You could do that by introducing new characters with Eastern names and slowly phasing out the older ones, or letting their lights fade out.Anyway, good luck, fellow author! Keep going. (Evil Mark approved, I’ll add it to my list.)
