I Have Four Dads After Transmigrating in a Novel

I’m not saying this novel is bad or something but come on be real giving wine to a 8 to 9 year old kid are you dumb?

Hilarious. I wish the chapter length was longer, but you can't have everything. Not much typos or grammatical errors. His insistence on dating a 3000 year old lady, I'll admit, is SLIGHTLY disturbing, but eh. I do wish he'd start cultivating in a way that makes at least a bit of sense, but I guess he really doesn't have to if it's meant to be senseless or an anything goes type of deal. I like the systems' personality, but it would probably be odd if you weren't used to systems who's goals in life seems to be to mess with the MC. 100/100, would totally eat popcorn to it again. Thx. _(ツ)_/

The dude looks like Son Saitama. This amuses me. Five stars____________________________________________________———————————————————————

why can't there be a novel were the little sister character or female character isn't pampered by the MC for once I mean come on it's getting on my nerves

What happened to the novel. Why it stopped updating. It was good to read now suddenly it stopped. The character and story development was pretty great.

I have a habit of noting down Pros and Cons when I give a book review.So starting with the Pros:I definitely feel there is an interesting plot here. I was curious to see where the main storyline actually began. You have written a good summary as well. It made me want to read on to get to the actual plot of the book. I feel you have good setup for your lead character for his eventual character growth. Guy is at this worst point and struggles with his current lifestyle. It gave me the impression that he'll eventually grow out of that and I was intrigued as to find out how he would do so.Now for the cons:There are a large number of grammar and punctuation mistakes throughout your book. It was almost jarring to read some of the setences because of this. You have also used many words incorrectly. I found several instances where you have used certain words which have a completely different meaning that what you intended. I would strongly suggest to recheck your earlier chapters because the mistakes there are quite vast. Lastly, I found the first 4 chapters to be very slow. Not much happens. I understand you were trying to show the readers that Guy is living in very bad conditions but honestly, it's been dragged on way too long. I was looking forward to get to the actual plot but it was chapter after chapter of Guy hating his life. Felt unnecessary.Overall I feel the amounts of mistakes I found definitely hindered the experience for me. I do believe this story could be very interesting, judging by the summary. I wish there was more focus on the plot and less dragged out descriptions of Guy's lifestyle. I wish you all the best because you have potential for improvement. I'd really like to give it another read once you've made a couple of changes.