So I actually finished all 51 chapters. It actually was pretty good in terms of mannerisms and writing quality from what I've read so far, but my main gripes are with some plot points. Characters are memorable, interactions were great, and the style of being set in Xuanxia setting was near perfect. Here are the problems I found when reading.1. Firstly, the mc commits suicide right on wedding day when he clearly enjoyed the girl's appearance and mannerisms. I found this rather ridiculous because after his soul returns to his body, he literally warms up to her simply because she didn't view him as a boy toy. The reasons as to why miss Yun even has such strong feelings for him, other than his looks, was never explained. I just found this plot point to be much too ridiculous. His relationship with servant girl made sense and is plausible, but he could literally know his wife more during the marriage rather than just suicide. I found it to be rather rash and stupid when the main character is clearly an intelligent genius.2. The white deer arc started and ended just as quick before we see the MC into a new area. I personally didn't like having his soul jump around so much before one plot point is finished, because it seems really messy and doesn't connect too well. Perhaps the story is still too early to know the reasonings for this, but after introducing a memorable character with likeable motives and personality, then sudden hopping to a different setting, felt really turning off for me.3. I don't think the character's powers were explained too well in terms of execution. So far, I know he has some sort of "soul power?" that allows him to face off against cultivators, but aside from that there's nothing else that's talked about more. MC seems to rely on this more than thinking of other ways to fight, and I suppose there's no other choice presently because he can't cultivate, but I think the polishing needs to be made so it's easier to diffrentiate what powers does the MC have. Tldr, It's well written and I'm glad most cliches were avoided. However, there's still things that require better execution in terms of plot. The setting, characters, and interactions are strong, but in terms of plot there's stuff that seems awkward to read at the moment. Also recommend changing your title since your MC truly did "die" and came back to life, because this story doesn't fit with a "Dark Age" theme.
