The story is interesting and has potential... I'm very intrigued by how the Hunter System would be as the story moves forward... However, the concept of the system itself needs a bit of background or introduction for readers who are not familiar and only starting to read system novels like me... Also, your book has so much dialogue, at least 75% I think. It kind of looks like a movie script or a manga / comic... It's not bad but when I try writing like that, I get a harsh rejection from my editor... "remember that you're writing a book not a script"... those are Webnovel's words from writing guidelines.
