I like the characters, they seem nice and interesting and the contrast in peraonalities is fun. Such as when the cashied doesn’t get to clock out and she assumes the universe hates her. The story so far (only 4 chapters) is funny and enjoyable. However, honestly I think the romance is progressing too quickly, and if someone’s going through a hard time it’s less realistic to spill it straight away, you also wouldn’t immediatley gush over someone after being cheated on? Constructive critisism: -most romance novels are better when the romance is at a slower more natural pace, if it’s too fast paced it may seem forced. -Also, for how she spilt her “backstory” of sorts to him, it’d be more realistic if you’d:1. Had her go in either slightly drunk causing her to spill, like she’d gone bar hopping and came here for a drink to clear her head to figure out what to do. 2. Had her go in distraught, him being attracted to her but not liking her yet, offers her a drink since “drinks help you drown your sorrow” and she lets her “backstory” loose after getting a bit tipsy.
