Finish Line ✓ - Reviews

the house was not very big: two bedrooms, an office and a dining room. in the back of the house there was a small garden where various vegetables grew. In one of the rooms there were two women. One of the women was standing and encouraging the second who lay on the liit. The second woman could not be described as incredibly beautiful, despite the pain that her face showed.

Thrishul burst out laughing.... "Prakruth I know you more than Punya knows you... You're a kind, sweet and straight forward person but a very bad actor. You can fool the idiot who just left... and many others who are around here but not me. Your try at sarcasm failed... Admit it...." he said.

Traje do demônio [ Merito ]  , Atributos : +20 BENEFICIO EM LUTA,

「Are, somehow this place is wet」

I hadn't seen Jacob in a while. I didn't even have the courage to call him. I knew he was suffering because of me and I honestly didn't know what to do or say to him. Every time I thought about Jacob I had to force myself to think about something else because I was engaged now and it wasn't fair on Edward.

"note taken" I groaned in pain  

Mc: "What?"

We go near a shade to talk and I explained her that Miyano decided to give up.

One if not the best fanfic of TODAG just refreshing not reading about the bull**** of not changing the future... ><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><>;)

Ahem, don't mind me while I artificially inflate the rating                                                                 ~               

I think the way it’s written is quite promising. I’m still not entirely sure whether the focus will be more on Adélard or Leon, but I can tell it’s building up the atmosphere well. I’m excited to see more football action, though. Right now, the action sequences are taking a larger role than the football moments, so I’m looking forward to seeing that shift as the story progresses.

This story is going great and I find it fun and intresting to read, personally I feel the story is a bit rushed, if you csn please kind of elaborate things and take it a bit slow, so that we can really immerse into the story rather then just feel like reading a rushed story, apart from the pace everything is really awesome keep going, hope you continue uploading.