Einar : The Forsaken - Reviews

"Sir, you had me get her for another reason. I think you explain why your not in the afterlife." Pearl said a straight tone.

"Don't call me by that name!" The sudden outburst caused Shirou to flinch. He recognized the other voice in the room as Koneko Toujou's.

Zie Xin has an annoyed look on her face since she woke up that morning because the scandal she was expecting didn't occur. She chose to stay in her room to groom herself in case the emperor arrives. She needs to be beautiful in front of him.

"MAAAA MAAAA!!! HAAAEEEELLPPP!!!" Hawk started to yell out for her mama, but it was futile.

"You are quiet hardheaded. Why don't you just die already" as he said that he give him a hard kick on his stomach and he was thrown a few meters. Blood came out on his mouth.

Only shooting stars break the mold

author is this novel on hiatus or is it dropped ???????

It's a greats story so far, I'm on chapter 6 so I don't really know what up to come on the future chapters when I get there. Gonna be a little surprised :) but I like it so keep up good work!

The author tried to create something ? I hope he/she continues his/her writing

I don't want to be a dickhead so I will give 4 stars, but genuinely i don't want to give that much but it's your first novel so i gave that much to motivate you here are some of my suggestions 1- Improve the synopsis, it's bad I mean really bad, at first after reading the synopsis I don't feel any attraction or interest to go and read2) Some things are confusing in Chapters you should mention thoughts and speak aloud abbreviations 3) And some mistakes like in the first chapter you didn't mention what race did the goddess suggest, If it's a mystery you should mention it that is, I hope you can take this positively