Echoes of The Primordial Flame - Reviews

'Why does he look so surprised? Do I tell him about the dream?'

The Spider just continues staring at me not moving.

"Oh, uh, yeah!" Jungkook says immediately despite the fact that he actually hasn't gotten the chance to wash up at all. He steps out of the shower anyway, Rapmon smiling at him and shutting the curtain after he exits, and as the maknae is reaching for a towel he realizes something.

          Ben Drowned, Ben was just a little boy that didn't know he had the devil curse on him so he lived in a castle dungeon and was tortured many times until one day he fainted from all of it. They put him in a bag and drowned him in the river with alligators the gators didn't go near him cause of the curse Ben rises up and went back in the castle.

[Yes, these are human footprints. of the type and number of prints are probably 3.]

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Out of nowhere, he saw a figure appear, he squinted his eyes as he tried to make out who or what the figure was. His heart started to thump in his chest, his palms getting sweaty as he started to hyperventilate.

"Look at you talking all big, just you wait." Leaf pouted before she followed along.

Your brain gets smart but your head gets dumb

" I... I am not the Goddess of Death, Zae. " I said " I didn't expect you to like Zae... " I continued as I suddenly let go of him and sit on the edge of the bed. I just sigh and smile at him.

Hello! Author here.DTM is my first novel ever, and I have tried my best to make it as good as possible. Please let me know what you think about it and ask any questions you may have.

(sorry in advance, english is not my native language)I've read the first 38 chapters. I really enjoyed the beginning of the story for the intelligence and honesty of the characters, the fact that there is a quid pro quo for power and use of the system, the mission to bring the deities back into the world, the grandiose battle scenes. However, I don't like the main character. He's interested in saving this other world to stay alive, he deliberately shows a brave attitude so that other people trust him, he's admired for his foolishness in the face of danger, and we don't know what he thinks about the presence of the gods. People just want him to lend them his strength without anything in return, and he regards them as NPCs, although he seems concerned about the two women who accompany him so that we, as readers, become attached to the characters. He's not a hero but still wants to act like one