DAWN OF DEVASTATION

seems promising so far. waiting desperately for more chapters.thanks for the good work. keep it up thanks for the good work. keep it upthanks for the good work. keep it up

Great so far! Skipped for a few days because of comedy tag but incredibly glad I gave in and picked this up. One of the few novels that made me curse that I binged the chapters available so quickly. Definitely has the makings of a top ranking story, keep it up Mr Author!

TL;DR: What starts as a potentially interesting premise is completely wasted, and this story is not worth the premium price. I hope the author continues to write, because there are occasionally interesting ideas presented, but it's clear they're still at the early stages of the craft.This story is a mess. Some readers won't be able to stop reading, like looking at a train wreck. You know it's horrible, but you can't look away.I am not one of those readers, so I'm getting off the bus here.The first 30 chapters are almost completely unrelated to what happens after. What was the point?The grammar is unbelievably bad. Like, machine-translation levels of bad. Good luck figuring out what genders characters are, as their pronouns are constantly changing. As are skill names, and everything else. Don't bother trying to follow the numbers, those are inconsistent as well.And, several chapters are just copy-paste from wikipedia, down to the footnote markers[3]. Copy-paste that seems to be machine-translated.It's a mess. I regret the time I spent reading the first 70+ chapters. Am I masochist? Plus, reviews are reportedly being removed. What was the point of writing this review then?

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She felt it was utterly pathetic to drink in her room alone though, so she ventured down to the hotel bar for the first time. She wasn't in the mood to dress up too much, so she wore a white silk button-down blouse, black skinny jeans and four-inch nude pumps. She probably looked more like she was applying for a job than going to a bar, but hey, with her figure she could pull it off. She'd forgone the heavier makeup she wore as an actress and only wore a little gloss and blush. With her new hairstyle, hopefully, no one would look too closely and associate her with her actress self.

"Hello? Yes, this is Mr. Goff. Gus' Biology teacher. Yes, im calling to ask a question. Is it correct that the boy needs to be at the airport at 5AM? Are you sure its not PM?"