Sorry, could not read past the first few paragraphs. I started against better judgment seeing that every word in the synopsis started with a capital letter. That was not the case in the first chapter luckily, but upper and lower case are not used according to standard English. The formatting generally should be revised. The punctuation separates connected elements into different sentences. Dialogue is written inside the running text without markers when it starts or stops. Etc. I realise this might be due to translation from a language where punctuation and other formatting rules are different. But it takes a lot of energy to figure out the text when it doesn't follow common writing rules at all, and the risk that the reader abandons it instead is big, which is a pity as the story itself might be good (I marked the other categories as "3" as I could not judge them.)
