To start I think this book has a lot of potential, with a great mc and background that gives the story a great fundamental that could see it being at the top of the power rankings for many weeks when it breaks through.Unfortunately the writing let’s down an otherwise great story, the high use of exclamation marks are mildly cringy and childlike, and the “story for another day” does nothing more than break immersion and cause annoyance. If I wanted a story for another day I’d just wait to read the chapter, the fact I’m reading the chapter means i want a story now! See right way to use an exclamation mark. I understand giving the readers things to wonder about to keep them reading but there’s much better methods. I hope these problems become fixed in later chapters (only about 50 in so far) but if they are I can see this novel really becoming popular. Would love to work on this novel as an editor to be honest!
