A Love Deal with Heartless Devil - Reviews

A Love Deal with Heartless Devil
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Hey guys, I don't know how many of you still remember me, but I'm back in action, and this time for good!
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when you have the right amount of fat in your body and people can't stop telling how hot you  look right now . But you know you should not be tempting to have that damn hot body cause it is not going to stay like that throught the year .  Cause i know my body is a scammer ! It will return back to my normal foodie pregnant sexy body . Okay i may or may not have alot of junk foods .
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How can be a person be an angel like him ......??????
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Fed to the rules and I hit the ground running
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Mary sank her fingernails into her arms as she inclined her body towards the corner of a dark room. The smell of old boxes and the faint scent of detergent filled the air around her. With the light coming only from the small glass window of the door, there was nothing left to see but the pale shadows giving shape to the tools of what the humans would use in their daily labors.
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my big gripe with the story is that it feels like a series of notes, or like you're watching a movie and it's just characters standing in a room while the narrator tells you what *would* be happening if it was a movie. there's a big rule of "show don't tell" in fiction and it's usually to avoid situations like this, it feels very "heavy" on the mind to just read chapter after chapter of expository paragraphs about a bunch of background information especially when it doesn't mean anything to us yet. we were introduced to a family of dragons, their names, histories, size, powers, relationship dynamics etc then they just got thrown away because "no this new guy is the mc". we got introduced to a void in space with these realm trees, spread out across the sky and glowing, a big empty space as the location for the novel, then it got deleted because "no actually were going over here to this heaven place instead". then we had to go through the whole process of exposition dumps for the people who mattered again, it feels like a burger wrapped in 4 layers of packaging, inside a sealed bag, placed in a locked chest, hidden in a wardrobe. even if it's our favourite thing ever the price is too high. you have to study and study chapters and chapters of homework just to get into this novel and I genuinely had to put my tablet down a few times to give myself time to relax from it all.

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