Wistful for Adventure - Reviews

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He stared directly at Nel. "They are family," he said strongly. "I couldn't stand aside and watch them get killed."

"You did well. Just take it easy and calm down." He said. "All I need you to do is calm down." He understood why she was like this. It was like when a Prey was cornered by a Predator. Right now they were being stalked. "We have a chance," Jack said nodding. A she talked the figures began to move closer. "These ones have intelligence clearly. We have a chance that they might be honorable and try to show off in combat and beat us down slowly."

"You lost it !!!!" said Aria in a rage . Ace felt a bit scared .

Let it be said, Hestia was willing to give up anything at this point just to have Bell open his eyes, to see him awake and alive was all she wanted at this point. She had already broken the ancient law

Then , Jake came and helped me up and I didn't really feel like blushing that time but then, he was blushing making me blush too! makes no sense right? So he said "so, b-bye" it felt so embarrassing for us AGAIN! and my heart was pounding super fast again when I reached back to my table that forgot about the queen and Jessica was starring at me saying "you felt in love with him did you?" I said "maybe I did, wait a minute, am I in... l-love?" Jessica was screaming so loud that it was hurting everyone's ear drums by now because she was thinking that Jake would be my boyfriend or whatever and I closed her mouth by stuffing a sandwich in her mouth (it was not easy to do cause her mouth was bigger than the sandwich so I placed 5 sandwiches in her mouth) and I skipped the afternoon classes and my excuse was saying I was sick.

"Oona watch out!!" Nicol screamed

The MC character acts like a degenerate, poor, miserable slave from the lowest class of society.  In every season, all he does is thank people and apologize a thousand times.  This is only done by a poor beggar who is grateful and apologetic at every moment.  As for the strong personality, he does not thank people even if they help him because he has dignity and pride. Also, MC is not evil, so the sign (scoundrel) must be removed. MC is weak and degenerate, he has neither pride nor dignity, and he behaves like a beggar.

Hi fellow newbie!I’ve really enjoyed seeing where you’ve taken this so far. I’m curious to see what comes next. Remember, don’t give up—I’m here to keep your spirits up!Oh, and if you have a moment, could you check out my book? It’s a fantasy adventure titled Bellator: Rising. The story follows a hero’s journey in a world I’ve meticulously crafted from the ground up. You’ll discover a unique mana system, intriguing species, various countries, and rich cultures, each with their own religions and laws.This is my first book, and I’m genuinely eager to get some feedback. Whether you’re an experienced writer or just a fan of fantasy, your insights could really help me improve. I’d love to hear your honest opinions!Thanks so much for considering giving it a read.Best, IkarisP.S. Your feedback would mean the world to me!

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