I never thought I would make it to my 21st birthday. I didn't know what was going to come after- A 21st birthday is supposed to be memorable. A good memory to have? God only knows that I got that wish right. Do you ever wish you could get a do-over day? Almost every day I wish that could happen. Only now- I think I may be stuck, is this hell? A purgatory? Or is it just my mind I can't escape? All I wish for now- is to go home.
Inconsistencies in point of views and choppy writing. Go back and edit. Spelling and grammatical correctness determine the success of your tome or not. This story needs major assistance.
This the best book I've read in any of the apps like this one. The plot is original. The characters are well developed. The story is well written. With a little editing, this could be published as a traditional book.
