good story so far. however Grammer is a little off and it gets confusing with time jumps and new characters. you should state the time jump in the chapter title and introduce the new characters a little better. all off sudden your reading as normal then all these new names and random story pops up.
Jooin finished picking what she needs, she was heading to the counter when a not-so-manly hand gripped hard on her shoulder. Her emotionless face showed a look of annoyance. Without looking at the person behind her, she spat the word, "What."
