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Val, a young man betrayed by his loved ones and cast out for being a dall'in, a beast controlled by it's endless hunger. Dall'ins' are remorseless and pitiless, with barely a mind of their own. Cast out and forced to flee from those hunting him, he runs to the Kuran mountain range and attempts to hide. Where will he be taken in this world of blood and iron, when he begins to hear a voice urging him forward to greater heights, what will he do to obtain power immemorial?

The story begins in the mountain ranges, and his past is slowly revealed as to how he became what he is. But the question is, if dall'ins' are mindless beasts with no forethought. Then what manner of beast is Val?

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First story constructive feedback pls papi

cover from book called the kings bastard by Rowena Cory Daniells ty to 91Blodhevn for tellin me

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Shameless author, I know but have to get the ball rolling.
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This is definitely more intended to girls the mc is just a stupid loser who feels sorry for himself but does nothing when people step on him i dont know what his own father teached him. He sees his own wife cheat on him but he never thought about filming it and getting divorced now she divorced him and got half of him money even when mc gets the power to make every girl beg him to put it in he is thil steeped on by his boss even cries like a little baby this guy is not a real man. Im also extremely annoyed by his character he is the perfect guy to NTR even if he got that power to make any female beg him to put his dick inside of her. For any man to read this they will go crazy maybe females out there like man being losers and being dominated by every girl he meets if i was him i would find any rich company that has a female president and **** her then take over the company earnings while having her work also build a fucking harem. I just cant believe how the mc can be soo fucking stupid and a pussy.
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Fuking hilarious please dont worry about writing inconsistencies because the story is already good so you dont need to worry about re-writing it
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Unique and different.  A person being reincarnated as a system. Just a few chapters but I am already hooked. On top of that,  the writing was superb. Each chapter was written well.  Everything was perfect. Author,  keep up the good work!
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"Yes I firmly believe in leaving no stone unturn for writing a good story" she said proudly. " It's my dream to be a famous journalist one day though its the one thing Jamie and I disagree on. He thinks my calling lies elsewhere. Just wait and see one day I'm going to prove him wrong and then he'll eat his own words. Stupid Jamie"
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