After reading so far, I did not find any problems at all. The grammars are and there seems to be no problem at all. The story was also very well written, great job author.
OMG! My pick for perfect couple is Zoey and Alex! Not bossy pants Lily, who thinks the whole world revolves around her. Zoey is my pick and nice stability of updates [i.e. 4 chapters a day]
