I’ll start off by saying I’m not a regular reader of the genre so I can’t compare it to other works, but I can say I found it to be an enjoyable read and will focus on the opening chapters. I liked how the MC’s characterization was done by showing his swift decision making and improvisation in the opening action sequence, accompanied by dialogues by other characters about him rather than use of a long internal monologue to expose his character.It has an action packed opening sequence which is gripping, but it might feel a tad long for some readers. If you are a fan of the action genre though, I can imagine this could be a plus rather than minus. As for the language, it is written in concise and clear sentences with hint of humor that comes across in MC’s narration during the fight which conveys more of an amusement than panic. The simple and direct tone of the narration is something I personally like myself, but it might feel a bit short of depth for readers who prefer more complex and nuanced writing style. One thing I can say though is that being simplistic does not equate to omission of necessary details here as you will never feel that the visualisation is lacking due to details it leaves out, i.e., what’s happening in the scenes are clearly delivered and never confusing. The basic world building is established to some extent through the action sequence rather than an exposition dump, so that was good because you get to see the variety of the MC’s power right from the start, and the fight with the mecha quickly establishes that it is a world that combines futuristic and high-tech era with fantasy element of magic like super powers coexisting. My only concern is that the opening chapters might be a hit or miss in general, as some readers who want more insightful exposition of the world and the lore early on might get impatient while those who like a slow build up would appreciate it. Overall, I think this is a work with potential that is worth giving a go. Good job!