I won't comment on the story as I've only read half of the first chapter. Instead I'd like to offer some advice. I was taken aback by the writing quality which seemed more like a proper book than a webnovel story but that's also the issue. The writing quality is too good/different for this website that most people won't actually want to read it so I recommend instead posting the story to RR where readers are more used to and willing to read this level of writing otherwise I believe this story will be buried and forgotten on this website.
