okay, im just going to give a good review because ill give u the benefit of the doubt for the future but objectively this is a 2/5. the pacing is all over the place, the descriptions are jarring. its just very poorly written. i really think you should study the basic conventions of good storytelling if u genuinely have a desire to progress ur writing skills. theres just weird info dumps+ lack of info if that makes sense and things are just well written. please study some more man before jumping into writing. although u might think its great from a reader pov theres just so much that doesnt make sense. def an improvement from ur previous works tho
