Love And Betrayal - Reviews

I'm gonna be true about this review.First the writing quality: 3It was well performed how you described the setting and characters. However, the way you write verb scenes, such as battle scenes, is awful. Additionally, your paragraph structure was unclear.Example:The beast lunged in his front with its club swing. Victor ducked down under it and dashed forward faster than the eye could see. He tore off both of its legs with a single slash. The ogre fell face forward.,The paragraph itself is fine, but the construction is awful. Additionally, if you consistently use a word like lunged, a new reader will find it unclear (which is you can just use the word hopped, leaped, or jumped)Updating stability: 5 updates a dayStory development: 4 its good for nowCharacter design: 4 since the paragraph structure was bad Worldbuilding: 5. too early to say so just support

'I will ask them about it later'

Defesa: 15

"Artemis is a young lady. She doesn't need to practice swordsmanship like a barbarian!!! Who will marry her if she's less ladylike then she already is??!!!" Shout back my mother.

Hati Fu Hongxue juga tenggelam. Tadi malam, di ruang gelap, dia belum benar-benar melihatnya dengan jelas. Dia hanya sedikit melihat garis besar tubuhnya.

"I love brother too."

But the meteor men beg to differ

In the shape of an "L" on her forehead

1. I have a dig bick2. You that read wrong3. You read that wrong too4. You checked5. You smiled7. You are wandering why you are still reading this8. You saw that mistake, right?(On 7)10. But did you see that I skipped 6?10. You checked11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 912. I said "saw you" not you saw13. I also skipped 214. You got tricked

Read like 30 chapters. Story still  doesn't make any sense and mc is an Idiot                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                 

keep up the good work, author!The world building is great, I could see that you have thought everything out. Continue on releasing more!

Crazy, I swear, this is so cool, I swear, your writing is pretty neat, and the storyline is also really good, the story is incredibly cool, after this I will read the next chapter, oh yeah, please update more hehehe ?