The story has so much potential. I’m sorry I couldn’t read it past the free chapters. It seems like a juvenile wrote this and it’s anti climactic. You will get better for sure but this isn’t for me. Sorry. It needs more of a mature conversation and flow.
I like the story line, it’s really good but its almost like a kid is writing the book. The grammar and how the sentences are formed need work. The author should find someone to proof read before they publish their writing.
