Descent into Villainy! - Reviews

Squeeze. Squeeze.

The Lord hummed in response to her question. He whispered, "You heard their discussion..."

After few seconds of running I've arrived in the Inn. There's a commotion inside, many people were crowding in a place so I go there. When I arrived I saw two men kicking the other men lying down. I'm familiar to the face of the two standing men, they are Vin's companions. And the one they beating up is... Ah! That's Lori's father!

"Jenny, please come back."

"Honey~"

"What are you waiting for, go kill it!" Ichigo screamed as he turned to look at Renji. When he looked over, he saw half of Renji's body was already out of his gigai while the other half seems to be stuck.

"I'm not joking Guy, look!" Daniel still pointing at Leo insisted, "In a few seconds he'll teleport!"

{Bell: Her eyes a shade of apple green. Her yellow/gold hair  always tried up into a bun, never allow the wind to follow through them. Sweet, kind hearted, always there for Clary if in need and almost like her mom. }

Strong start! Great world-building :)  I can't wait to see what happens next with these characters. I found the concept very interesting and the writing intriguing, keep up the good work!

main character's kind of a coward. Could have more spine.

There are some slight misspellings, and I saw a few times that the words used didn't really fit the narrative. However, overall, it is a pretty good story.