||Hollowed|| - Reviews

store man : alright alright because your asking nicely

"Looks like my college is also going to go without a girlfriend"

Smiling cheekily at MJ I say, "Okay so I should make sure she likes me which I know she does do check. Then ask her on a date, ok I can do that. Then I should wait for a couple date before I ask her to be my girlfriend? Ok I think I can do that." MJ looking even sadder now replies, "Well Peter I wish you the best of luck in trying to get this mystery girl to go on a date with you. I think I am just going to go home now I don't feel so good all of a sudden."

Suddenly I feel something changing.

I nodded lazily and quicken my cleaning.

The water's getting warm so you might as well swim

In the shape of an "L" on her forehead

I will shamelessly give myself a 5 star review. If you read my work and disagree kindly inform me which part you want me to improve on. I'm here to improve my writing and every constructive review will be appreciated ?

WQ 4/5 : Author did a marvelous job..SD 3/5 : It is a little slow for my liking and I still feel MC is super dumb but, you know he is a football player not a finance guy .. but still I did like the developement.. I personally think .. he could have just gone for another club instead of all the drama.. CD 3/5 : same as above...WB 4/5 : There are some mistakes but overall it is goodOverall .. 3.6/5... A good story , I may not like it much but I think you should give it a read