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Only shooting stars break the mold
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"Oh, nothing~" Rachel lightly sing sang. She had a betraying smile plastered on her face. She couldn't stop thinking about it.
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She wore Sakura Pink Kimono Dress, Sakura Red Skirt and Black High Boots. Her appearance is 18 years old and 170 cm in height.
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well it's a great novel, it's intriguing and exciting. it reminds me of the American series Lucifer,this novel also has a great sense of humour
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The Good:  We have a fairly easy-to-understand setting and a MC with plant-based abilities is fairly unique.  The world appears to be large and full of different groups than just humans and not the typical fantasy tropes.  (Elves, dwarves, demons sorta thing)The Bad:  The writing quality starts to slip.  I can understand this because you start getting your flow, and you let it spill out onto the figurative paper in order to keep it going.  Just remember to read the chapter after you finish it.  A LOT of details are missing especially around the abilities and Thally.  Early on Seth keeps saying Thally helped him, but we are not shown that help.  Lastly, only once or twice are we given any background information about the world around the characters.  A lot of details can be inferred from the text, but I had a hard time getting through some parts since I kept having to figure out certain things on my own.The Neutral:  When you write, try to think about the perspective of the reader.  If this is slowing you down or getting in the way, go ahead and finish the chapter first but then go back and read it again.  A lot of the holes will be filled in automatically as the author, but readers cannot do the same without some details from the author.  We don't need to know what their school uniforms look like since it is fine for each reader to imagine their own ideal uniform, but I don't know anything about Seth's appearance.  You have something good going on here so keep it up.  Your first story will be rough, but keep going and it will get better.  You have a story you want to tell that you think others will enjoy so keep going and show us your story!
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An interesting read, would love to look in further to the story you crafted

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